Friday, May 22, 2015

Journal # 8

The sample research paper, “Out of Shadows” was very informative and well written. The writer explained and organized the essay in a way that it was easy to read and understand. The introduction had an intriguing hook and described the two terms that were discussed throughout the essay, which is slavery and human trafficking. Ending human trafficking is extremely hard because it is worldwide. The first body paragraph allows the reader to understand in detail what is the true definition of trafficking and slavery and how people get these two ideas confused.

Including real accounts of women who have been in the ring of trafficking gives the essay an emotional appeal. As a girl I sympathize with these women who had dreams and were fooled by cowardly men who promised them a prosperous future. These men take advantage of poor innocent young girls and they are the ones who need to be locked up. Incriminating these victims for prosecution is cruel. Most of these girls are scared for their lives and families and fear that if they tell an officer the cops will not believe them. The conclusion was just as strong as the introduction and I think it was very captivating. The overall essay was very strong and the thesis was clear.

No comments:

Post a Comment